Got me shocked with NSFW right off the bat bahaha for sure wasn't expecting it, even made me double-check if it wasn't a game like Lustful Desire (I mean, heavily focused on sexual content)
It's interesting - and also, probably the first VN I ever saw that has a rabbit as MC xP
We know that an NSFW scene this early can be quite surprising, but the MC has a pretty open sexuality and it's a relatively important element later on in the story, so we wanted it to be clear from the beginning. The story is the focus though, even with the sexual elements!
I'm reeaally enjoying the progression of NeveN~ n_n I love the writing style and pacing, the characters and thier art, and I'd like to give praise towards both the world building and sociology xou've put so much thought into as it truely brings the world to life~ UwU
Gilliant was originally a love interest, but we feel like his personality is a little too close to Vekad's, and it would have been repetitive for the readers. We kept the possibility of bringing him back though. It would require a lot of rewriting, so it's one of our Patreon's goal.
I very much enjoy this story! The premise is wonderful and I thoroughly enjoy the main character. The other characters are interesting and unique and there is still so much to come. Looking forward to it!
I really have to say, this is amazing. It seems to drag on at moments, but it's extremely interesting when I actually restrain myself and read through it.
I played the first build and was a little excited, but couldn't really get a scope on the game. However, this newest build is incredibly detailed and it reaches out to audiences. It's amazing.
Spoilers:
Two suggestions/comments on my part: Firstly, Maelbjorn's name is practically invisible against the backgrounds of the training room. I don't know how you would want to deal with that, but I usually can't tell that it's him speaking until I realize someone is actually speaking and look for a name.
And secondly, when the MC finishes training with Maelbjorn, it says that he feels a lot better; "Not everything is perfect, obviously, but I'm better," but then the MC feels compelled to insult the prince. But wouldn't it make sense, alongside choosing either "Make an inappropriate remark" or "Insult Maelbjorn," to have the option to not say anything? It's implied that their relation is improving, so why would the MC inherently want to insult the prince? Idk, just my take on the matter.
For the first point, multiple people complained about the color so we will try to find a lighter shade of brown, and if it doesn't work out we will use a different color if needed.
Spoiler!
For the second remark, teasing/insulting Maelbjorn is a way of advancing their relationship either way. The first choice is shown as more of a teasing game than a real insult, that's kind of the MC's thing to play on words and say witty remarks. Moreover, it's also a way to further show his state of mind, he is never going to pass up an opportunity to tease, even more so if it concerns a member of the royalty. The occasion is too good for him to pass up, that's why we don't think it's in his character to just not say anything.
I hope this answer is satisfactory and thank you again for both reading our VN and giving us your feedback, it's really appreciated!
I can understand that; he is a bard, it's kind of in their nature to take jabs at royalty.
Me being me, I had to try out both choices, but I was surprised and awed at his reaction to insulting him, and holy hell - I'm just now realizing how diverse and original each character is. You guys are putting so much effort into this VN, and it really shows. From the bottom of my heart, I hope this VN gets the attention it deserves, although I hope y'all don't become overwhelmed as more people play your VN.
Would you be ok if we use them? We might have to change one thing (replacing heaven with gods in Maelbjorn's couplet, it would stick more with the overall theme of the story), but most of it would stay that way!
You will be credited in the VN if you agree, obviously!
For Maelbjorn's couplet, to keep each line with ten syllables, here are two possible alternatives:
Once an heir, god-sentenced to perdition / The sword has become his chief ambition.
The gods sentenced this heir to perdition / So the sword became his chief ambition.
If you want to talk more about this, I'm Kopten#9136 over on Discord. Let me know if there's anything else localization-wise you'd want a second opinion on, I love this sort of thing.
I just finished playing all the way to the latest build and I have to say that I really enjoyed it! For only 2 builds in, there is a lot of story and overall writing which I enjoyed greatly. The writing and storytelling is really well done and I really like where the story is going. I also can't wait to get to know the love interests better in the next build. Definitely gonna be keeping an eye on this VN from now on. Keep up the amazing work!
c cool d'enfin voir un virtual novel crée par un français. (Je travaille sur le mien à coté mais il est loin d'avoir atteint un stade de développement suffisamment avancée pour que je puisse le publier ^^'. Je me demande même si je vais pouvoir le publier un jour :'( XD )
en vrai tu peux commencer quelque chose de sympa sans trop te prendre la tête. Le codage de ren'py est plutôt rudimentaire de base (bien que quelqu'un d'expérience peut rajouter des choses dessus). Perso je galère surtout car je ne dessinais pas sur tablette graphique avant et je trouve la transition papier à numérique assez inconfortable ^^'.
Enjoyed build 0.2 ^^_ nice to meet the full cast, and I gotta say, Maelbjorn and Vekad have just been added to my simp list~ n_n every1ne needs a tsundere stag or a cocksure bear in thier lives~ :p and I know Gilliant isn't a possible romance, but I dooo wish he was UwU that's 1ne hunky meow~ Rawr! ^///^ I love the MC's personality, he's so relatable, and xour writing style really helps to immerse us in the world. Great job, keep up the good work >.</
A really solid first build, made me intrigued to read more! :-)
I enjoyed the writing a lot. I especially liked the relationship between the MC and Erwan, they had great chemistry and an interesting dynamic, and even though I'm guessing we won't be seeing Erwan again, this makes me confident future characters are going to be interesting as well.
The setting is also pretty interesting, the marks remind me a lot of the dragonmarks of Eberron fame.
The VN has room to grow in terms of visuals and music, but what was there was serviceable, and I'm guessing you are going to have more assets to play with once we get to know the other main characters.
One small thing that was pretty noticeable while playing is that Akhet's sprites are not aligned, so every time his expression changes the whole sprite moves slightly. I would suggest fixing that because I doubt it was intentional. :-)
Thank you for your interest in NeveN, we really appreciate the feedback!
You should like the next build as well, since we intend to always improve on the storytelling and dialogues while fixing the problems you talk about here. There will be more characters and more sprites, and the problems of the first build will be fixed as well. Akhet's sprite will be aligned and the sprites in general will appear differently so that the whole thing will be easier on the eye.
Thanks again for the kind words, and we hope you will have as much fun to read as we have to write this story!
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super le premier Roman que je lie en VF .
super hate de la suite Bravo jai bien aimée.
On est contents de pouvoir apporter une touche française au paysage de la VN, et encore plus contents que ça te plaise !
Mrowl~! King Aeon O///O [drools]
That's an interesting game :D
Got me shocked with NSFW right off the bat bahaha for sure wasn't expecting it, even made me double-check if it wasn't a game like Lustful Desire (I mean, heavily focused on sexual content)
It's interesting - and also, probably the first VN I ever saw that has a rabbit as MC xP
Thanks a lot for the kind words!
We know that an NSFW scene this early can be quite surprising, but the MC has a pretty open sexuality and it's a relatively important element later on in the story, so we wanted it to be clear from the beginning. The story is the focus though, even with the sexual elements!
We hope you like the rabbit, by the way!
Loved the 0.4 update, keep up the good work! Can't wait to read the rest :3
It's only going to get better and better from now on, so enjoy the ride!
I'm reeaally enjoying the progression of NeveN~ n_n I love the writing style and pacing, the characters and thier art, and I'd like to give praise towards both the world building and sociology xou've put so much thought into as it truely brings the world to life~ UwU
Thanks a lot for the kinds words! We intend to show you a bit more of our world with each update, and hope you'll like the rest of it as much!
Gillian isn't a love interest, is he? Pity...
Gilliant was originally a love interest, but we feel like his personality is a little too close to Vekad's, and it would have been repetitive for the readers. We kept the possibility of bringing him back though. It would require a lot of rewriting, so it's one of our Patreon's goal.
I very much enjoy this story! The premise is wonderful and I thoroughly enjoy the main character. The other characters are interesting and unique and there is still so much to come. Looking forward to it!
Hey, thanks a lot for the compliments! We hope the next builds will satisfy your expectations!
I really have to say, this is amazing. It seems to drag on at moments, but it's extremely interesting when I actually restrain myself and read through it.
I played the first build and was a little excited, but couldn't really get a scope on the game. However, this newest build is incredibly detailed and it reaches out to audiences. It's amazing.
Spoilers:
Two suggestions/comments on my part: Firstly, Maelbjorn's name is practically invisible against the backgrounds of the training room. I don't know how you would want to deal with that, but I usually can't tell that it's him speaking until I realize someone is actually speaking and look for a name.
And secondly, when the MC finishes training with Maelbjorn, it says that he feels a lot better; "Not everything is perfect, obviously, but I'm better," but then the MC feels compelled to insult the prince. But wouldn't it make sense, alongside choosing either "Make an inappropriate remark" or "Insult Maelbjorn," to have the option to not say anything? It's implied that their relation is improving, so why would the MC inherently want to insult the prince? Idk, just my take on the matter.
Hey thanks for your advices!
For the first point, multiple people complained about the color so we will try to find a lighter shade of brown, and if it doesn't work out we will use a different color if needed.
Spoiler!
For the second remark, teasing/insulting Maelbjorn is a way of advancing their relationship either way. The first choice is shown as more of a teasing game than a real insult, that's kind of the MC's thing to play on words and say witty remarks. Moreover, it's also a way to further show his state of mind, he is never going to pass up an opportunity to tease, even more so if it concerns a member of the royalty. The occasion is too good for him to pass up, that's why we don't think it's in his character to just not say anything.
I hope this answer is satisfactory and thank you again for both reading our VN and giving us your feedback, it's really appreciated!
Alright, thanks for the reply!
I can understand that; he is a bard, it's kind of in their nature to take jabs at royalty.
Me being me, I had to try out both choices, but I was surprised and awed at his reaction to insulting him, and holy hell - I'm just now realizing how diverse and original each character is. You guys are putting so much effort into this VN, and it really shows. From the bottom of my heart, I hope this VN gets the attention it deserves, although I hope y'all don't become overwhelmed as more people play your VN.
Thank you very much, your compliment goes straight to our hearts, it helps us a lot to move forward and we hope to give you as much in return!
I'm interested in seeing where this goes. I really liked your french couplets, so I tried to make english versions of them:
Maelbjorn
An heir, heaven sentenced to perdition
The sword has become his chief ambition
Akhet
Peckish fear and exile keep him wary
The southern minstrel seeks sanctuary
Vekad
So strong and slender, the lord of the hunt
Pursued by phantoms that he must confront
Tenoch
Heir of the dragons, lover of the flame
Avoiding cold and blade should be his aim
Hey, we really like those translations!
Would you be ok if we use them? We might have to change one thing (replacing heaven with gods in Maelbjorn's couplet, it would stick more with the overall theme of the story), but most of it would stay that way!
You will be credited in the VN if you agree, obviously!
Oh wow, of course! I'd be honored!
For Maelbjorn's couplet, to keep each line with ten syllables, here are two possible alternatives:
If you want to talk more about this, I'm Kopten#9136 over on Discord. Let me know if there's anything else localization-wise you'd want a second opinion on, I love this sort of thing.
im still laughting the fact that you file name to download say "Never.Never-release."
and im like "pls do release"
Haha don't worry, it will release in due time!
so it will "Never" not release?
sorry for the bad pun
I just finished playing all the way to the latest build and I have to say that I really enjoyed it! For only 2 builds in, there is a lot of story and overall writing which I enjoyed greatly. The writing and storytelling is really well done and I really like where the story is going. I also can't wait to get to know the love interests better in the next build. Definitely gonna be keeping an eye on this VN from now on. Keep up the amazing work!
We are really glad you liked it, the next build is coming soon so your wait will not be long! :)
Enjoyed the story and the characters. Sadly Gilliant isn't romanceable character ;-; Keep up the good work.
Thanks a lot!
Wait. What the fuck is this Is this. French? I can't fucking read French
It should be solved now!
c cool d'enfin voir un virtual novel crée par un français. (Je travaille sur le mien à coté mais il est loin d'avoir atteint un stade de développement suffisamment avancée pour que je puisse le publier ^^'. Je me demande même si je vais pouvoir le publier un jour :'( XD )
Pareil pour moi, je trouve ca tres sympa
D'ailleurs perso j'y connais R en création de visual novels, mais j'adorerais faire le mien
en vrai tu peux commencer quelque chose de sympa sans trop te prendre la tête. Le codage de ren'py est plutôt rudimentaire de base (bien que quelqu'un d'expérience peut rajouter des choses dessus). Perso je galère surtout car je ne dessinais pas sur tablette graphique avant et je trouve la transition papier à numérique assez inconfortable ^^'.
Enjoyed build 0.2 ^^_ nice to meet the full cast, and I gotta say, Maelbjorn and Vekad have just been added to my simp list~ n_n every1ne needs a tsundere stag or a cocksure bear in thier lives~ :p and I know Gilliant isn't a possible romance, but I dooo wish he was UwU that's 1ne hunky meow~ Rawr! ^///^ I love the MC's personality, he's so relatable, and xour writing style really helps to immerse us in the world. Great job, keep up the good work >.</
Quick question, will there be CG artwork in this VN?
Yes, there will be CG in the future!
A really solid first build, made me intrigued to read more! :-)
I enjoyed the writing a lot. I especially liked the relationship between the MC and Erwan, they had great chemistry and an interesting dynamic, and even though I'm guessing we won't be seeing Erwan again, this makes me confident future characters are going to be interesting as well.
The setting is also pretty interesting, the marks remind me a lot of the dragonmarks of Eberron fame.
The VN has room to grow in terms of visuals and music, but what was there was serviceable, and I'm guessing you are going to have more assets to play with once we get to know the other main characters.
One small thing that was pretty noticeable while playing is that Akhet's sprites are not aligned, so every time his expression changes the whole sprite moves slightly. I would suggest fixing that because I doubt it was intentional. :-)
Keep up the good work!
Thank you for your interest in NeveN, we really appreciate the feedback!
You should like the next build as well, since we intend to always improve on the storytelling and dialogues while fixing the problems you talk about here. There will be more characters and more sprites, and the problems of the first build will be fixed as well. Akhet's sprite will be aligned and the sprites in general will appear differently so that the whole thing will be easier on the eye.
Thanks again for the kind words, and we hope you will have as much fun to read as we have to write this story!
Very nice project, congratulations for this launch. I can't wait to see the sequel.
Thanks a lot! Really glad you like our work.
Really good so far~ ^^_ I can just tell that this is going to be 1ne of the greats~ keep up the good work! >_</
Woaw, as a VN's fan, that's quite a big compliment you gave us!
Je suis intrigué, je vais très surement essayer ^^
vas-tu faire une version mobile?
On y travaille, si tout va bien elle devrait arriver relativement rapidement !
cool merci =)
Definitely gonna check out!
Thanks a lot for taking interest for our story!
Great VN... The Tale about musician and adventure.
Can't wait for More ^^
We're happy to have you with us on this adventure! :)