Just started playing and got to the party and I was definitely not expecting the Temptations Ballad reference with Collodi Bonebreaker and crew! Loving the game so far.
I've always loved how different each route is despite sharing many similar scenes, like how Maelbjorn's is a nice slow burn romance while Tenoch's is more of passion turned into something more tender, yet despite me becoming familiar with these themes, I'm still surprised by how much the paths have diverged, especially Vekad's.
Xou guys are doing an amaaazing job. Character coherence and world building are so important to me. NeveN never fails to deliver when it comes to quality
We're delighted to see that you're still enjoying the VN! Hopefully you'll like the rest of the story just as much, especially as things are going to start to vary a lot between the different routes as they progress.
My biggest gripe was how each route felt like same things happening but talking to different person about them, this new vekad adventure just might make the vn a lot more fun to me if it succeeds
J'espèrais une route avec Gilliant mais une merveilleuse histoire tout de même. J'ai hâte d'essayer les autres routes. Présentement je suis allé avec Maelbjorn.
Déjà parce qu'il est en français (ce qui est extrêmement rare pour ne pas dire quasiment unique dans le genre des FVN), et ensuite bien évidemment pour sa qualité d'écriture, tant au niveau de l'histoire, du worldbuilding et des personnages !
L'attitude du MC tranche franchement avec ce qu'on a l'habitude de voir et c'est un vrai vent de fraîcheur, toute cette assurance et ce côté assuré !
J'aime beaucoup la façon dont sont construites les différentes routes, en espérant une happy end pour chacune d'entre elle (en particulier Maelbjorn qui est mon favori, mais ça c'est mon faible pour les ours qui parle eheh)
J'ai maintenant hâte de voir ce que la prochaine mise à jour nous réserve ! Un grand bravo au créateur en tout cas :)
Tu ne sais pas à quel point on est heureux de voir des commentaires en français, surtout quand c'est si gentil ! On a très envie de faire découvrir le monde des FVN aux francophones, donc ça nous réchauffe le cœur quand ça atteind ce public. :)
On a tout aussi hâte de te faire découvrir la suite de cette histoire, rendez-vous non pas le mois prochain mais celui d'après !
As for the language selection screen, we thought about it and it's an idea we are keeping for later, since there are plenty of other things we have to improve first. We keep that in mind though, thanks for the suggestion!
Ah-ha! I knew it~ :D I figured out the MC's gesture through a few different things, mainly because he hadn't actively sung since the competition, but also when he and Ahket went to the bar and weren't able to perform :p
Xou guys have opened up A LOT of great possibilities story wise by giving the MC the ability to peek into alternate realities. I personally think this is an awesome decision from a writer's perspective UwU
I absolutely ADORE where this tale is going~ I love how unique each path is. They have their own feeling and vibe, while still aligning with the overall story :) I always feel so good after an update n__n the tale is so fun, and despite being pretty serious, it's still lighthearted enough to leave readers feeling aflutter :3
Thank xou sooo much for all the hard work xou guys put into NeveN! ^^_
(PS. I DEEPLY appreciate that xa'll took the logical route with the kiss the MC and Ahket share. Smooching a beak is a bit weird and I've always thought a snout rub to be far more appropriate UwU)
Hey, thanks, it's always pretty nice and heartwarming to read your comments! :)
As for the gesture, yep, you guessed it right! It was the most logical thing for a bard such as our beloved rabbit!
We are very eager to show all the possibilites around the brands and their different powers and after-effects, you'll see we have some nice surprises in stock for you!
You better buckle up for September's build, because it's big and very important for the overall story. We can't wait to release it!
I sadly only download every 4our updates, so that I can spend the day with each guy :p but I'm already looking forward to it! ^^_ excited to see what xou guys have planned~ :D
Does the word Neven come up at all in the story? i wanted to named the MC that (its a very pretty word! definitely fits the cute bunny!) but it could get confusing.
that actually happened to me once before lol on a gba game
That's very kind of you, thanks a lot for your support! We'll be working hard on NeveN until the end, and believe me when I say things are going to get pretty wild! :)
Having played through every route so far, I'm loving them all! Just wish Gilliant was also a route, he may be similar to Vekad in his vibe but he's so interesting I'd play the game over again just for him haha.
I'm glad you liked all the routes! As for Gilliant, his route is one of our Patreon objectives in the long term, so who knows, maybe one day we'll get to write for him!
Ahh~ n///n Vekad is such a good match for the MC! <3 _<3 While my favourite may be Maelbjorn, I just think that the MC and Vekad play off of each other's personalities so well~ :p Although... I miiight just have a disposition towards tsundere personalities "^^_ But I also can't deny that there is something so very romantic, poetic even, about a hunter and a singer becoming involved~ UwU
I love where xou're taking the story :) It's really nice to see all the pieces fit together after playing every route :3 Everything has been so well thought out, and even better paced, that not only does it feel natural, but it always invokes such a good feeling whenever I read UwU
Xou've set the stage and introduced the actors perfectly, so now with the overture passed, the main act can commence, and I am very much excited to see where it leads~! Keep up all the great work! \>_</
(Oh, and sbtw, I have a sneeaaky suspicion what the MC's gesture is, especially seeing as he hasn't done it since... ;P)
Hey, thanks for all these compliments, it's really appreciated! With each build, we are so, so impatient to show more! It will only increase in intensity from now on! I hope you'll tell us what your suspicions were once the MC's gesture of awakening is revealed!
"du coin de l'œil, j'aperçois la hyène qui nous a avertis hier en train de discuter avec le reste de ce que je suppose être le reste de sa troupe, un blaireau et une labrador."
Je suis sûr à 99% que ceci est une référence à l'excellent Temptation's Ballad, je vous applaudis 👏 (why hello there, Cole, Sidd and Artemi).
Jusqu'ici très très bon VN au passage ! C'est la première fois que j'en vois un en français (malgré le fait d'en avoir joué/lu une bonne quarantaine) et ce fut une belle suprise. Ce fut un plaisir de le lire et j'attends la suite avec impatience. Chapeau bas, je vous souhaite toute la réussite pour la suite !
Content de voir que quelqu'un a finalement repéré la référence, je pense que tu es le premier à nous le dire ! Merci énormément du commentaire, ça nous fait vraiment plaisir de voir que notre travail plait à d'autres francophones. Nous avons bien l'intention de faire en sorte que la suite soit tout aussi bonne, voire meilleure !
Read the new update and thought I might share some of my thoughts.
First of all I absolutely LOVE the atmosphere, the writing, music and designs combine a very interesting setting that is always fun to return to. The worldbuilding is also fantastic, I'm so interested in discovering more about the different countries, their traditions, the gods, everything. And last but not least I absolutely love the characters. The protagonist feels unique and chaotic but also fun and wholesome, it's such a nice combination that fits to a bard. I admit I have to read the other routes as well but what Akhets content is so damn adorable. His kind personality but also his passion to music and to protect people that are close to him make him such a lovable character and it's always a pleasure to see him around the protagonist.
All in all I will definitely recommend the VN and hope for more great content, keep up the good work
Thanks a lot! It's really great to see that you liked our universe and our characters so much. We'll do everything to improve while staying on this path!
The wolf in the second picture isn't a love interest? "Do you know how sad a wolf can get when left alone?" ...or is he? If it's no trouble asking, because I would like to know before hand.
Hi! The wolf is not a love interest, but that doesn't mean that nothing happens with him! The different routes are the four characters presented in the description of NeveN ( Akhet, Maelbjorn, Tenoch and Vekad).
Is there information on the heights of the main characters. I know Erik's height but I am eager about the other main character's height since they are often described as towering Erik.
I really love the overall vibe NeveN has~ :) it's fun to read, the setting is familiar yet fresh, and the story is compelling :3
Might I make the smallest of suggestions to a word xou used? I've been writing furry smut for a while now, and I always try to keep anthropomorphs as animalistic as possible, which leads me to deliberate over atomical differences and the right terms to use.
Xou use the word "Cloaca" for Tenoch, and while that is perfectly fine, both as an artistic decision and to make saurian genitals sound more animalistic, I think refering to it as a "Genital slit" might be the better choice "^__^
I personally use cloaca more for the naga I write about, as they use that single hole to do all their business, and I think that when xou consider the anthro form, a "Genital slit" becomes more appropriate as their intestines aren't connected to this passage. But 1nce again, that's just my 2wo cents n_n"
Great work as always, can't wait to see where the story goes~! :D
I really must commend xou on not just xour writing style, but the ability to do it so fluidly UwU the importance of having a sentence flow in dialogue is imperative in capturing the readers attention, so the ability to do that while also incorporating an older style of writing is seriously impressive~ :)
Praise be to the diversity of the routes! ^__^/ while I expected only a few changes in dialogue with each path, xou've incorporated far more than I anticipated :3 which is really nice when xou consider that most VN' simply change a few lines
Maelbjorn is best boy, btw~ :p give us more handsome bear! \>o</ xD
Hey, thanks! Your comment means a lot to us, especially since we are writers first and foremost!
It's always reassuring to have that kind of feedback, because it compliments both our writing and the quality of our translation. It's important for us to be able to reach you through these words!
As for the routes, we are happy to bring that diversity, and the more the VN will progress, the more each route will be different (even though we intend to have some similar events between the routes).
And don't worry about Maelbjorn, you have a whole route of handsome bear prince ahead of you!
did you just replace 'you'... an inherently genderless pronoun... with 'xou'...? ...to remove gender connotations?? how do you even pronounce that????? why??????????
Lmao xD no, no, I recognise myself as male n_n It actually started out as a typo that I latched onto when I was... 13irteen? :/ It's kinda just become part of the way I type UwU same thing with how I replace number letters, ie: 1ne, 2wo, 3hree. And I guess I kinda pronounce "Xou" and "K-yoo" in my head "^^_
Got me shocked with NSFW right off the bat bahaha for sure wasn't expecting it, even made me double-check if it wasn't a game like Lustful Desire (I mean, heavily focused on sexual content)
It's interesting - and also, probably the first VN I ever saw that has a rabbit as MC xP
We know that an NSFW scene this early can be quite surprising, but the MC has a pretty open sexuality and it's a relatively important element later on in the story, so we wanted it to be clear from the beginning. The story is the focus though, even with the sexual elements!
I'm reeaally enjoying the progression of NeveN~ n_n I love the writing style and pacing, the characters and thier art, and I'd like to give praise towards both the world building and sociology xou've put so much thought into as it truely brings the world to life~ UwU
Gilliant was originally a love interest, but we feel like his personality is a little too close to Vekad's, and it would have been repetitive for the readers. We kept the possibility of bringing him back though. It would require a lot of rewriting, so it's one of our Patreon's goal.
I very much enjoy this story! The premise is wonderful and I thoroughly enjoy the main character. The other characters are interesting and unique and there is still so much to come. Looking forward to it!
I really have to say, this is amazing. It seems to drag on at moments, but it's extremely interesting when I actually restrain myself and read through it.
I played the first build and was a little excited, but couldn't really get a scope on the game. However, this newest build is incredibly detailed and it reaches out to audiences. It's amazing.
Spoilers:
Two suggestions/comments on my part: Firstly, Maelbjorn's name is practically invisible against the backgrounds of the training room. I don't know how you would want to deal with that, but I usually can't tell that it's him speaking until I realize someone is actually speaking and look for a name.
And secondly, when the MC finishes training with Maelbjorn, it says that he feels a lot better; "Not everything is perfect, obviously, but I'm better," but then the MC feels compelled to insult the prince. But wouldn't it make sense, alongside choosing either "Make an inappropriate remark" or "Insult Maelbjorn," to have the option to not say anything? It's implied that their relation is improving, so why would the MC inherently want to insult the prince? Idk, just my take on the matter.
For the first point, multiple people complained about the color so we will try to find a lighter shade of brown, and if it doesn't work out we will use a different color if needed.
Spoiler!
For the second remark, teasing/insulting Maelbjorn is a way of advancing their relationship either way. The first choice is shown as more of a teasing game than a real insult, that's kind of the MC's thing to play on words and say witty remarks. Moreover, it's also a way to further show his state of mind, he is never going to pass up an opportunity to tease, even more so if it concerns a member of the royalty. The occasion is too good for him to pass up, that's why we don't think it's in his character to just not say anything.
I hope this answer is satisfactory and thank you again for both reading our VN and giving us your feedback, it's really appreciated!
I can understand that; he is a bard, it's kind of in their nature to take jabs at royalty.
Me being me, I had to try out both choices, but I was surprised and awed at his reaction to insulting him, and holy hell - I'm just now realizing how diverse and original each character is. You guys are putting so much effort into this VN, and it really shows. From the bottom of my heart, I hope this VN gets the attention it deserves, although I hope y'all don't become overwhelmed as more people play your VN.
Would you be ok if we use them? We might have to change one thing (replacing heaven with gods in Maelbjorn's couplet, it would stick more with the overall theme of the story), but most of it would stay that way!
You will be credited in the VN if you agree, obviously!
For Maelbjorn's couplet, to keep each line with ten syllables, here are two possible alternatives:
Once an heir, god-sentenced to perdition / The sword has become his chief ambition.
The gods sentenced this heir to perdition / So the sword became his chief ambition.
If you want to talk more about this, I'm Kopten#9136 over on Discord. Let me know if there's anything else localization-wise you'd want a second opinion on, I love this sort of thing.
I just finished playing all the way to the latest build and I have to say that I really enjoyed it! For only 2 builds in, there is a lot of story and overall writing which I enjoyed greatly. The writing and storytelling is really well done and I really like where the story is going. I also can't wait to get to know the love interests better in the next build. Definitely gonna be keeping an eye on this VN from now on. Keep up the amazing work!
c cool d'enfin voir un virtual novel crée par un français. (Je travaille sur le mien à coté mais il est loin d'avoir atteint un stade de développement suffisamment avancée pour que je puisse le publier ^^'. Je me demande même si je vais pouvoir le publier un jour :'( XD )
en vrai tu peux commencer quelque chose de sympa sans trop te prendre la tête. Le codage de ren'py est plutôt rudimentaire de base (bien que quelqu'un d'expérience peut rajouter des choses dessus). Perso je galère surtout car je ne dessinais pas sur tablette graphique avant et je trouve la transition papier à numérique assez inconfortable ^^'.
Enjoyed build 0.2 ^^_ nice to meet the full cast, and I gotta say, Maelbjorn and Vekad have just been added to my simp list~ n_n every1ne needs a tsundere stag or a cocksure bear in thier lives~ :p and I know Gilliant isn't a possible romance, but I dooo wish he was UwU that's 1ne hunky meow~ Rawr! ^///^ I love the MC's personality, he's so relatable, and xour writing style really helps to immerse us in the world. Great job, keep up the good work >.</
A really solid first build, made me intrigued to read more! :-)
I enjoyed the writing a lot. I especially liked the relationship between the MC and Erwan, they had great chemistry and an interesting dynamic, and even though I'm guessing we won't be seeing Erwan again, this makes me confident future characters are going to be interesting as well.
The setting is also pretty interesting, the marks remind me a lot of the dragonmarks of Eberron fame.
The VN has room to grow in terms of visuals and music, but what was there was serviceable, and I'm guessing you are going to have more assets to play with once we get to know the other main characters.
One small thing that was pretty noticeable while playing is that Akhet's sprites are not aligned, so every time his expression changes the whole sprite moves slightly. I would suggest fixing that because I doubt it was intentional. :-)
Thank you for your interest in NeveN, we really appreciate the feedback!
You should like the next build as well, since we intend to always improve on the storytelling and dialogues while fixing the problems you talk about here. There will be more characters and more sprites, and the problems of the first build will be fixed as well. Akhet's sprite will be aligned and the sprites in general will appear differently so that the whole thing will be easier on the eye.
Thanks again for the kind words, and we hope you will have as much fun to read as we have to write this story!
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Just started playing and got to the party and I was definitely not expecting the Temptations Ballad reference with Collodi Bonebreaker and crew! Loving the game so far.
You are one of the few people to have caught this easter egg haha! We love Temptation's Ballad, so we wanted to give a lil' nod to the VN! :)
Is there a problem with the current build for android? Maelbiörns route is the same than before
It was a patreon build only, the public one will be out the 15!
Ah yes. Im stupid XD thanks
BRO THE CHAPTER PAGES ARE SO FRIGGEN SCARY ISTG I GET SO WEARY EVERYTIME
Hang in there, don't be spooked!
I've always loved how different each route is despite sharing many similar scenes, like how Maelbjorn's is a nice slow burn romance while Tenoch's is more of passion turned into something more tender, yet despite me becoming familiar with these themes, I'm still surprised by how much the paths have diverged, especially Vekad's.
Xou guys are doing an amaaazing job. Character coherence and world building are so important to me. NeveN never fails to deliver when it comes to quality
We're delighted to see that you're still enjoying the VN! Hopefully you'll like the rest of the story just as much, especially as things are going to start to vary a lot between the different routes as they progress.
My biggest gripe was how each route felt like same things happening but talking to different person about them, this new vekad adventure just might make the vn a lot more fun to me if it succeeds
We hope you'll find what you're looking for in one of the routes from now on, as they should be quite different from each other!
J'espèrais une route avec Gilliant mais une merveilleuse histoire tout de même. J'ai hâte d'essayer les autres routes. Présentement je suis allé avec Maelbjorn.
J'espère que tu apprécieras les autres personnages, ils ont chacun une personnalité très différente !
NOOO imma cry I just finished the last chapter of Maelbjorn's route, I was excited to go to town with him😭😭😭
Don't worry, you will be able to go to town with him soon! His next build is in April!
Une véritable belle découverte ce VN !
Déjà parce qu'il est en français (ce qui est extrêmement rare pour ne pas dire quasiment unique dans le genre des FVN), et ensuite bien évidemment pour sa qualité d'écriture, tant au niveau de l'histoire, du worldbuilding et des personnages !
L'attitude du MC tranche franchement avec ce qu'on a l'habitude de voir et c'est un vrai vent de fraîcheur, toute cette assurance et ce côté assuré !
J'aime beaucoup la façon dont sont construites les différentes routes, en espérant une happy end pour chacune d'entre elle (en particulier Maelbjorn qui est mon favori, mais ça c'est mon faible pour les ours qui parle eheh)
J'ai maintenant hâte de voir ce que la prochaine mise à jour nous réserve ! Un grand bravo au créateur en tout cas :)
(ps : must protect Akhet)
Tu ne sais pas à quel point on est heureux de voir des commentaires en français, surtout quand c'est si gentil ! On a très envie de faire découvrir le monde des FVN aux francophones, donc ça nous réchauffe le cœur quand ça atteind ce public. :)
On a tout aussi hâte de te faire découvrir la suite de cette histoire, rendez-vous non pas le mois prochain mais celui d'après !
(ps : l'oiseau sera mis en cage pour sa sécurité)
Me who learnt French in school
my dumbass that was able to decifer 3 words. Before finding the English translation.
Haha, sorry about that!
At least it gave you a chance to practise your French, I guess!
it's fine honestly. I haven't learnt French in like 6 years so I am really rusty.
I do somehow remember the numbers 1-10 off by heart.
Un deux trois quatre cinq six sept hute nerf dix
Almost right! It's huit and neuf for 8 and 9! :)
I'm happy to see people learning our language, especially since it's a hard one to learn!
I found the fact that France had the most types of cheese enticing.
So I decided to take French classes as a hobby in school.
It was honestly more fun then expected.
Oh and before I forget, why not put up a language selection screen first time you load into the game? So players don't get confused.
Just a suggestion but it would save people from confusion. Anyway have a good day 😊
Oh yeah, cheese is life! :D
As for the language selection screen, we thought about it and it's an idea we are keeping for later, since there are plenty of other things we have to improve first. We keep that in mind though, thanks for the suggestion!
Have a good day! :)
SPOILER (I guess? :/)
Ah-ha! I knew it~ :D I figured out the MC's gesture through a few different things, mainly because he hadn't actively sung since the competition, but also when he and Ahket went to the bar and weren't able to perform :p
Xou guys have opened up A LOT of great possibilities story wise by giving the MC the ability to peek into alternate realities. I personally think this is an awesome decision from a writer's perspective UwU
I absolutely ADORE where this tale is going~ I love how unique each path is. They have their own feeling and vibe, while still aligning with the overall story :) I always feel so good after an update n__n the tale is so fun, and despite being pretty serious, it's still lighthearted enough to leave readers feeling aflutter :3
Thank xou sooo much for all the hard work xou guys put into NeveN! ^^_
(PS. I DEEPLY appreciate that xa'll took the logical route with the kiss the MC and Ahket share. Smooching a beak is a bit weird and I've always thought a snout rub to be far more appropriate UwU)
Hey, thanks, it's always pretty nice and heartwarming to read your comments! :)
As for the gesture, yep, you guessed it right! It was the most logical thing for a bard such as our beloved rabbit!
We are very eager to show all the possibilites around the brands and their different powers and after-effects, you'll see we have some nice surprises in stock for you!
You better buckle up for September's build, because it's big and very important for the overall story. We can't wait to release it!
I sadly only download every 4our updates, so that I can spend the day with each guy :p but I'm already looking forward to it! ^^_ excited to see what xou guys have planned~ :D
Actually, it will be a common build for everyone (with slight differences on each route), so you won't have to wait for that one!
Great news then! \n__n/ thankx for the heads up
Does the word Neven come up at all in the story? i wanted to named the MC that (its a very pretty word! definitely fits the cute bunny!) but it could get confusing.
that actually happened to me once before lol on a gba game
Yes! NeveN is an important word in this universe, as you will soon find out!
oh, nice to know! guess ill go with the default name then
you deserve it, your game is great and I can't wait to see more! I hope your game will continue its success, you're all seriously underrated!
That's very kind of you, thanks a lot for your support! We'll be working hard on NeveN until the end, and believe me when I say things are going to get pretty wild! :)
Having played through every route so far, I'm loving them all! Just wish Gilliant was also a route, he may be similar to Vekad in his vibe but he's so interesting I'd play the game over again just for him haha.
I'm glad you liked all the routes! As for Gilliant, his route is one of our Patreon objectives in the long term, so who knows, maybe one day we'll get to write for him!
Ahh~ n///n Vekad is such a good match for the MC! <3 _<3 While my favourite may be Maelbjorn, I just think that the MC and Vekad play off of each other's personalities so well~ :p Although... I miiight just have a disposition towards tsundere personalities "^^_ But I also can't deny that there is something so very romantic, poetic even, about a hunter and a singer becoming involved~ UwU
I love where xou're taking the story :) It's really nice to see all the pieces fit together after playing every route :3 Everything has been so well thought out, and even better paced, that not only does it feel natural, but it always invokes such a good feeling whenever I read UwU
Xou've set the stage and introduced the actors perfectly, so now with the overture passed, the main act can commence, and I am very much excited to see where it leads~! Keep up all the great work! \>_</
(Oh, and sbtw, I have a sneeaaky suspicion what the MC's gesture is, especially seeing as he hasn't done it since... ;P)
Hey, thanks for all these compliments, it's really appreciated! With each build, we are so, so impatient to show more! It will only increase in intensity from now on! I hope you'll tell us what your suspicions were once the MC's gesture of awakening is revealed!
"du coin de l'œil, j'aperçois la hyène qui nous a avertis hier en train de discuter avec le reste de ce que je suppose être le reste de sa troupe, un blaireau et une labrador."
Je suis sûr à 99% que ceci est une référence à l'excellent Temptation's Ballad, je vous applaudis 👏 (why hello there, Cole, Sidd and Artemi).
Jusqu'ici très très bon VN au passage ! C'est la première fois que j'en vois un en français (malgré le fait d'en avoir joué/lu une bonne quarantaine) et ce fut une belle suprise. Ce fut un plaisir de le lire et j'attends la suite avec impatience. Chapeau bas, je vous souhaite toute la réussite pour la suite !
PS Akhey best boy, just throwing it out there
Content de voir que quelqu'un a finalement repéré la référence, je pense que tu es le premier à nous le dire ! Merci énormément du commentaire, ça nous fait vraiment plaisir de voir que notre travail plait à d'autres francophones. Nous avons bien l'intention de faire en sorte que la suite soit tout aussi bonne, voire meilleure !
Read the new update and thought I might share some of my thoughts.
First of all I absolutely LOVE the atmosphere, the writing, music and designs combine a very interesting setting that is always fun to return to. The worldbuilding is also fantastic, I'm so interested in discovering more about the different countries, their traditions, the gods, everything. And last but not least I absolutely love the characters. The protagonist feels unique and chaotic but also fun and wholesome, it's such a nice combination that fits to a bard. I admit I have to read the other routes as well but what Akhets content is so damn adorable. His kind personality but also his passion to music and to protect people that are close to him make him such a lovable character and it's always a pleasure to see him around the protagonist.
All in all I will definitely recommend the VN and hope for more great content, keep up the good work
Thanks a lot! It's really great to see that you liked our universe and our characters so much. We'll do everything to improve while staying on this path!
The wolf in the second picture isn't a love interest? "Do you know how sad a wolf can get when left alone?" ...or is he? If it's no trouble asking, because I would like to know before hand.
Hi! The wolf is not a love interest, but that doesn't mean that nothing happens with him! The different routes are the four characters presented in the description of NeveN ( Akhet, Maelbjorn, Tenoch and Vekad).
I see, thank you for letting me know.
Is there information on the heights of the main characters. I know Erik's height but I am eager about the other main character's height since they are often described as towering Erik.
Erik is 160 (5'3), Maelbjorn 210 (6'11), Vekad (with antlers) 225 (7'4), Tenoch 183 (6) and Akhet 175 (5'9).
Without antlers, Vekad would be around Maelbjorn's height?
He would be a little smaller than Maelbjorn without antlers.
Thanks.
I really love the overall vibe NeveN has~ :) it's fun to read, the setting is familiar yet fresh, and the story is compelling :3
Might I make the smallest of suggestions to a word xou used? I've been writing furry smut for a while now, and I always try to keep anthropomorphs as animalistic as possible, which leads me to deliberate over atomical differences and the right terms to use.
Xou use the word "Cloaca" for Tenoch, and while that is perfectly fine, both as an artistic decision and to make saurian genitals sound more animalistic, I think refering to it as a "Genital slit" might be the better choice "^__^
I personally use cloaca more for the naga I write about, as they use that single hole to do all their business, and I think that when xou consider the anthro form, a "Genital slit" becomes more appropriate as their intestines aren't connected to this passage. But 1nce again, that's just my 2wo cents n_n"
Great work as always, can't wait to see where the story goes~! :D
Hey, thanks again for the feedback, it's always appreciated!
I'll look into the translation to replace the word cloaca then, I trust you on that one! Thank you!
Sympa la référence a Zelda avec l'histoire du vieux qui donne une épée au héros ^^
Un classique haha !
A sassy rabbit, a serious but kind prince, a shy bird, a nearly deranged hunter and a horny lizard....
Chef kiss
You can add to that a great commentator!
True!
This seem interesting, going to give it a try ;)
Thanks! Once it's done, don't be shy and give your opinion, we'd love some feedback! Have a good read!
Holy cow, I finished it in two days. From the first read I was hooked, it was simply awesome! :3 I can not wait to see how it would continue.
(Especially love Akhet, he´s such a cutie :3)
I'm glad to read your comment, it's always heartwarming to see people like our VN!
We're quite impatient to show you more, and you shouldn't have to wait for long, next public build is in 11 days.
It seems that Akhet is very popular, I can understand why, he is indeed quite soft and cute!
I really must commend xou on not just xour writing style, but the ability to do it so fluidly UwU the importance of having a sentence flow in dialogue is imperative in capturing the readers attention, so the ability to do that while also incorporating an older style of writing is seriously impressive~ :)
Praise be to the diversity of the routes! ^__^/ while I expected only a few changes in dialogue with each path, xou've incorporated far more than I anticipated :3 which is really nice when xou consider that most VN' simply change a few lines
Maelbjorn is best boy, btw~ :p give us more handsome bear! \>o</ xD
Hey, thanks! Your comment means a lot to us, especially since we are writers first and foremost!
It's always reassuring to have that kind of feedback, because it compliments both our writing and the quality of our translation. It's important for us to be able to reach you through these words!
As for the routes, we are happy to bring that diversity, and the more the VN will progress, the more each route will be different (even though we intend to have some similar events between the routes).
And don't worry about Maelbjorn, you have a whole route of handsome bear prince ahead of you!
did you just replace 'you'... an inherently genderless pronoun... with 'xou'...? ...to remove gender connotations?? how do you even pronounce that????? why??????????
Lmao xD no, no, I recognise myself as male n_n It actually started out as a typo that I latched onto when I was... 13irteen? :/ It's kinda just become part of the way I type UwU same thing with how I replace number letters, ie: 1ne, 2wo, 3hree. And I guess I kinda pronounce "Xou" and "K-yoo" in my head "^^_
huh O.O
hmmm... the "scene" is a surprice for me...like alot didnt expect that at all
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super le premier Roman que je lie en VF .
super hate de la suite Bravo jai bien aimée.
On est contents de pouvoir apporter une touche française au paysage de la VN, et encore plus contents que ça te plaise !
Mrowl~! King Aeon O///O [drools]
That's an interesting game :D
Got me shocked with NSFW right off the bat bahaha for sure wasn't expecting it, even made me double-check if it wasn't a game like Lustful Desire (I mean, heavily focused on sexual content)
It's interesting - and also, probably the first VN I ever saw that has a rabbit as MC xP
Thanks a lot for the kind words!
We know that an NSFW scene this early can be quite surprising, but the MC has a pretty open sexuality and it's a relatively important element later on in the story, so we wanted it to be clear from the beginning. The story is the focus though, even with the sexual elements!
We hope you like the rabbit, by the way!
Loved the 0.4 update, keep up the good work! Can't wait to read the rest :3
It's only going to get better and better from now on, so enjoy the ride!
I'm reeaally enjoying the progression of NeveN~ n_n I love the writing style and pacing, the characters and thier art, and I'd like to give praise towards both the world building and sociology xou've put so much thought into as it truely brings the world to life~ UwU
Thanks a lot for the kinds words! We intend to show you a bit more of our world with each update, and hope you'll like the rest of it as much!
Gillian isn't a love interest, is he? Pity...
Gilliant was originally a love interest, but we feel like his personality is a little too close to Vekad's, and it would have been repetitive for the readers. We kept the possibility of bringing him back though. It would require a lot of rewriting, so it's one of our Patreon's goal.
I very much enjoy this story! The premise is wonderful and I thoroughly enjoy the main character. The other characters are interesting and unique and there is still so much to come. Looking forward to it!
Hey, thanks a lot for the compliments! We hope the next builds will satisfy your expectations!
I really have to say, this is amazing. It seems to drag on at moments, but it's extremely interesting when I actually restrain myself and read through it.
I played the first build and was a little excited, but couldn't really get a scope on the game. However, this newest build is incredibly detailed and it reaches out to audiences. It's amazing.
Spoilers:
Two suggestions/comments on my part: Firstly, Maelbjorn's name is practically invisible against the backgrounds of the training room. I don't know how you would want to deal with that, but I usually can't tell that it's him speaking until I realize someone is actually speaking and look for a name.
And secondly, when the MC finishes training with Maelbjorn, it says that he feels a lot better; "Not everything is perfect, obviously, but I'm better," but then the MC feels compelled to insult the prince. But wouldn't it make sense, alongside choosing either "Make an inappropriate remark" or "Insult Maelbjorn," to have the option to not say anything? It's implied that their relation is improving, so why would the MC inherently want to insult the prince? Idk, just my take on the matter.
Hey thanks for your advices!
For the first point, multiple people complained about the color so we will try to find a lighter shade of brown, and if it doesn't work out we will use a different color if needed.
Spoiler!
For the second remark, teasing/insulting Maelbjorn is a way of advancing their relationship either way. The first choice is shown as more of a teasing game than a real insult, that's kind of the MC's thing to play on words and say witty remarks. Moreover, it's also a way to further show his state of mind, he is never going to pass up an opportunity to tease, even more so if it concerns a member of the royalty. The occasion is too good for him to pass up, that's why we don't think it's in his character to just not say anything.
I hope this answer is satisfactory and thank you again for both reading our VN and giving us your feedback, it's really appreciated!
Alright, thanks for the reply!
I can understand that; he is a bard, it's kind of in their nature to take jabs at royalty.
Me being me, I had to try out both choices, but I was surprised and awed at his reaction to insulting him, and holy hell - I'm just now realizing how diverse and original each character is. You guys are putting so much effort into this VN, and it really shows. From the bottom of my heart, I hope this VN gets the attention it deserves, although I hope y'all don't become overwhelmed as more people play your VN.
Thank you very much, your compliment goes straight to our hearts, it helps us a lot to move forward and we hope to give you as much in return!
I'm interested in seeing where this goes. I really liked your french couplets, so I tried to make english versions of them:
Maelbjorn
An heir, heaven sentenced to perdition
The sword has become his chief ambition
Akhet
Peckish fear and exile keep him wary
The southern minstrel seeks sanctuary
Vekad
So strong and slender, the lord of the hunt
Pursued by phantoms that he must confront
Tenoch
Heir of the dragons, lover of the flame
Avoiding cold and blade should be his aim
Hey, we really like those translations!
Would you be ok if we use them? We might have to change one thing (replacing heaven with gods in Maelbjorn's couplet, it would stick more with the overall theme of the story), but most of it would stay that way!
You will be credited in the VN if you agree, obviously!
Oh wow, of course! I'd be honored!
For Maelbjorn's couplet, to keep each line with ten syllables, here are two possible alternatives:
If you want to talk more about this, I'm Kopten#9136 over on Discord. Let me know if there's anything else localization-wise you'd want a second opinion on, I love this sort of thing.
im still laughting the fact that you file name to download say "Never.Never-release."
and im like "pls do release"
Haha don't worry, it will release in due time!
so it will "Never" not release?
sorry for the bad pun
I just finished playing all the way to the latest build and I have to say that I really enjoyed it! For only 2 builds in, there is a lot of story and overall writing which I enjoyed greatly. The writing and storytelling is really well done and I really like where the story is going. I also can't wait to get to know the love interests better in the next build. Definitely gonna be keeping an eye on this VN from now on. Keep up the amazing work!
We are really glad you liked it, the next build is coming soon so your wait will not be long! :)
Enjoyed the story and the characters. Sadly Gilliant isn't romanceable character ;-; Keep up the good work.
Thanks a lot!
Wait. What the fuck is this Is this. French? I can't fucking read French
It should be solved now!
c cool d'enfin voir un virtual novel crée par un français. (Je travaille sur le mien à coté mais il est loin d'avoir atteint un stade de développement suffisamment avancée pour que je puisse le publier ^^'. Je me demande même si je vais pouvoir le publier un jour :'( XD )
Pareil pour moi, je trouve ca tres sympa
D'ailleurs perso j'y connais R en création de visual novels, mais j'adorerais faire le mien
en vrai tu peux commencer quelque chose de sympa sans trop te prendre la tête. Le codage de ren'py est plutôt rudimentaire de base (bien que quelqu'un d'expérience peut rajouter des choses dessus). Perso je galère surtout car je ne dessinais pas sur tablette graphique avant et je trouve la transition papier à numérique assez inconfortable ^^'.
Enjoyed build 0.2 ^^_ nice to meet the full cast, and I gotta say, Maelbjorn and Vekad have just been added to my simp list~ n_n every1ne needs a tsundere stag or a cocksure bear in thier lives~ :p and I know Gilliant isn't a possible romance, but I dooo wish he was UwU that's 1ne hunky meow~ Rawr! ^///^ I love the MC's personality, he's so relatable, and xour writing style really helps to immerse us in the world. Great job, keep up the good work >.</
Quick question, will there be CG artwork in this VN?
Yes, there will be CG in the future!
A really solid first build, made me intrigued to read more! :-)
I enjoyed the writing a lot. I especially liked the relationship between the MC and Erwan, they had great chemistry and an interesting dynamic, and even though I'm guessing we won't be seeing Erwan again, this makes me confident future characters are going to be interesting as well.
The setting is also pretty interesting, the marks remind me a lot of the dragonmarks of Eberron fame.
The VN has room to grow in terms of visuals and music, but what was there was serviceable, and I'm guessing you are going to have more assets to play with once we get to know the other main characters.
One small thing that was pretty noticeable while playing is that Akhet's sprites are not aligned, so every time his expression changes the whole sprite moves slightly. I would suggest fixing that because I doubt it was intentional. :-)
Keep up the good work!
Thank you for your interest in NeveN, we really appreciate the feedback!
You should like the next build as well, since we intend to always improve on the storytelling and dialogues while fixing the problems you talk about here. There will be more characters and more sprites, and the problems of the first build will be fixed as well. Akhet's sprite will be aligned and the sprites in general will appear differently so that the whole thing will be easier on the eye.
Thanks again for the kind words, and we hope you will have as much fun to read as we have to write this story!